Can't put a sentence together

The dozens of UBC professors who penned a letter of apology for not doing more to protect students from sexual assaults can't write. 

This blog is not about the subject matter because frankly, I no longer have a clue about what is considered sex, sexual assault, consent, non-consent, drunken sex -- or even light-hearted flirting.  This is about the pathetic, public letter written by supposedly highly-educated people and published far and wide.  Here is an example:

"We apologize to the people affected for not doing and not demanding better.  We, as a group of UBC faculty members, wish now to publically acknowledge this harm that resulted from a failure of UBC to take as seriously as it should its duties of care to members of its community.  As faculty members, we share in a responsibility to ensure that UBC fulfill its obligations to protect its community."

If you know anything about grammar or sentence structure, you will have counted about nine outright errors and poor wording.  The late Maclean-Hunter editor, Mrs. Jean Portugal, the finest under whom I have ever had the pleasure of toiling and learning, would have instructed me to write it as follows:

We apologize to the people affected for our neither doing, nor demanding, better.  We wish to publically acknowledge (you don't need "faculty members" because they have signed it, and you don't need "now" because it's a dated letter) the harm this failure has caused our community.  (There are so many superfluous words in the original it's difficult to identify each.)  We share in the responsibility of ensuring UBC (you don't need "that") fulfill its obligations to the community.  (Again, you don't need to repeat "faculty members" and one writes "of ensuring", not "to ensure".)

It's appalling that people earning huge salaries -- and some presumably tenured -- can't write correctly. 

Please.